Pitching our new idea to Matt and Luke

As our previous idea wasn’t as successful as we intended it to be, my group and I learnt from our mistakes and created a new thriller idea. When we built our idea we considered all of Matt and Luke’s appropriate, helpful and beneficial comments from our pitch from our previous thriller.

When pitching our idea to Matt and Luke for the second time, we were more prepared for constructive criticism. We all similarly spoke with confidence and understanding of our thriller and all notably remembered the most effective techniques towards a successful pitch. In preparation, my group and I produced a detailed overview of our story line and the opening sequence including relevant, clear information towards our idea.

Story Line

When creating the story line, I tired to make it as simple as possible as I find this is most effective, therefore the story line is simple and straightforward and leaves audience members asking questions. I watched many different films and news documentary to help be inspired for my thriller. For example, the character ‘James Bond’ in the film ‘Spectre’ inspired us to construct our idea, as we know the character well and therefore could adapt our creativity to alter the character into something unique and original. Our film will be based around a male character, allowing the audience to focus on him as he is shown to be the hero in the movie.

We have created two alternative ideas for our story line, for instance, the first idea is having a male character represented as a hero as he is caught up in a mysterious mission allowing him to follow people and kill villain’s but similarly at the same time the villain’s can hunt him down to avoid him killing them. So therefore, the whole film is an ongoing chase of action between the hero and villains. From this story line, the opening sequence could connect to a mission he was completing but the villain’s find him and beat him up by wanting to torture him for the rest of his life instead of killing him straight away.

The other story line is based around a young man with a very basic lifestyle, including a simple, ordinary job, and living alone with his younger sister who needs serious care, as she is ill. They don’t have any parents, as they both died in a car crash. From his parent’s loss, a lot of problems have started to abrupt. For example, he doesn’t have enough for himself and his sister’s everyday needs, let alone to provide enough money to pay for a cure for his sister’s illness.  Although, one day he meets a woman who surprisingly can help his sister and will pay for her treatment to cure her, however he has to kill several people in return for her helping his sister get better. From him either completing this crime or not, he is putting someone’s life in danger whatever he chooses to do, as if he kills someone he puts his life at risk but is he doesn’t his sister doesn’t receive any treatment. However, he decides to put his life at risk and goes round killing targeted people the women demands he kills. From murdering several people, he begins to have enemies that want to kill him too, but he saves his sibling’s life.

Opening Sequence

The opening sequence is located in a small, cold, empty grey room, almost looking like a cell, to portray the effect claustrophobia and this will help to build tension. We will include a big heavy-duty door with a single padlock on it and hundreds of keys spread all over the floor. Our opening sequence consists of a male protagonist with bruises and cuts on his face waking up, in the small confined room, confused about where he is. He wakes up to find lots of different keys directly in front of his eyes and soon realises he needs to get out of this room. However, he recognises the door is locked and he needs to quickly find the correct key to get out, although time is rapidly running out.

From pitching our story line and the opening sequence to Matt and Luke, their feedback overall was positive and very effective and therefore they gave us approvable for our idea. They said they felt they could connect to our character and quoted “it could be a very successful opening sequence.” Their advice for us was now to think of all the different possibilities for the character to get more frustrated and tense, for example, through the use of sound of a clock ticking or screaming from other victims.